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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014
The bar chart illustrates ten of the highest
countries
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 consuming money
in
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apply
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traveling
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travelling
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, China was the most interested nation in travel
while
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 Taiwan had the lowest cost of travelling.
Moreover
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, the top four
countries
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 in
this
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 statistics spent four times more than other
countries
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 on average. To clarify more, Chinese people spent about 110
billion
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 dollars
while
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 the United States and Germany took over 80
billion
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.
Additionally
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, the fourth place country was the United Kingdom consuming approximately 58
billion
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.
Although
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 it was around half of the first figure, British people were three times greater than the number of other
countries
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.
In contrast
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, the
last
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 five areas in the chart consumed nearly 20
billion
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Destinations
  • Global economy
  • Tourist influx
  • Consumption patterns
  • Luxury travel
  • Budget tourism
  • Outbound tourism
  • Disposable income
  • Exchange rates
  • Tourism sector
  • Hospitality industry
  • Inbound tourism
  • Travel advisories
  • Infrastructure
  • Revenue generation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Leisure activities
  • Global events
  • Tourist demographics
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