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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map below depicts the view of the museum in 1998 and
the
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some changes after its development in the next two decades.
Overall
, the picture shows that the permanent exhibition rooms were smaller but
it
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 had more public facilities to enjoy. The visualization details that the museum had big permanent exhibition rooms on the right and left
side
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 of the building.
In contrast
,
the
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20 years later, the areas were only on the right side. When we went
the
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 museum from the
entrace
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entrance
/exit door, we would find the shop on the right side, but in 2008 it was relocated
on
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 the left with the bags &
coats
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and coats
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 room in the next space. Keeping forward from the gate, there was a garden that in 2008 was developed to be more beautiful with the fountains and cafe sitting area on the corner.
In contrast
, the cafe was not
big
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 as before but,
this
 construction had a restaurant which could
make
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 the visitors
had
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more options for
the
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foods
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food
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 and drinks. In the previous, temporary
exhbition
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exhibition
 was on the corner, but
then
 was enlarged near to the in-house park.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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