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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
chat
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chart
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 shows the
comparations
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comparison
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 of the total number of pineapples
export
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exported
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 which were produced by three different countries in 2009 and 2019,
while
 the pie chart illustrates the proportion of the
cost
each
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of each
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pineapples
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pineapple
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 in 2019.
overall
,
country
 C produced the smallest number of
pineapple
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pineapples
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compare
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compared
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 to
country
 A and
country
 B, and the
dominat
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dominant
cost
 is allocated for distribution and retail. in 2009
country
 A exported about 1
millions
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million
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 metric tonnes and in 2019 has
increasing
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increased
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 dramatically
at
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to
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 more than 10
millions
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million
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matric
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metric
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 tonnes. Different from
country
 A,
country
 B sent approximately 5 million in 2009, and it was the biggest,
while
country
 C was only under 1
millions
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million
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. In 2019,
country
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countries
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 B and C exported their product under 2
millions
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million
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. the
pproportion
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proportion
 of
cost
 can be distributed as
follow
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follows
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, 35% was allocated to distribution and retail. Profit was 18% and tax was
in
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apply
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16%. import licences and international transport are 10% and 12% respectively, and 5% was for
producer
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producers
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. the smallest proportion was for export
cost
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costs
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, it was only 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, country, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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