Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is a debate about the issue of crime punishment
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it should be fixed or should be decided
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or the motive.
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it is important to have fixed punishments as it enables the judges not to abuse Laws , I believe that considering different circumstances is vital because not all
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. On the one hand, one of the reasons why fixing punishments for different crimes is crucial is
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the fact that it helps majesty not to take advantage of the laws.
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to say, the majority of the judges use
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power in court and
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people who have committed simple
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not only leaves them devastated but
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depressed.
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, If all crime punishment is fixed, it will help people to know that they have been disciplined fairly.
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, research done at Makerere by
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John shows that around 50% of the prisoners are being over
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, I think that so many factors have to be considered when deciding to penalize someone
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penalizing must not
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, despite the above point, I agree that officers should consider what a person has done wrong and the motive he or she had as some
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illegal acts are done
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, a greater number of members who are imprisoned have committed crimes unknowingly without being aware that it will turn into an
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, others break laws because of peer groups, trying to fit in a group but not with the aim of hurting others. As proof, a lot of Ugandan
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are thrown into prison without putting into account what was their aim
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doing so.
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, I agree that judges must consider so many things before disciplining. In conclusion, even though fixing
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for each
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officers from over abusing the law, I think that before poisoning people
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long or small periods, a judge should consider what was the goal of doing so as some crimes are not
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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