Government should spend tax money on public libraries rather than public transportation improvements. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is argued that
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should allocate most part of its tax income
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public libraries compared with general transportation
devolopment
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development
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Although
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improve
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the knowledge of people throughout the country, I believe spending money on transportation is
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important to the country as it gives immense support to the development and
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crucial
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role in
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the quality of life. so, I am in disagreement with
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Your essay lacks coherence and cohesion because it ends abruptly and doesn't proceed beyond the first point. To improve, structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and logically connected sentences. Use conjunctions and transition words to enhance the flow of your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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