The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

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information about the excuse and the main problem for

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, there are 5 reasons for going to

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and 6 problems

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travelling public. Many

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going to

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travel

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because of work and the biggest main

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when travelling is the price of

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cheaper transportation or

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hotel. Looking in more detail, the unpopular excuse for going

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visit

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friends or relatives only 6%. The second around ten

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is doing social activities or recreation.

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shopping

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foods

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and other goods is the third reason for travelling. After that other excuses

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personal reasons at 19%. The

last

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and the most reason for

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is to and from work, almost half

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main

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issues for

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public

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dominated by the budget

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travel

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visa

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for going abroad and meals, at 36%.

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, around 19%

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peoples

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people

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choose safety concerns as the second

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, highway congestion and access to public transport respectively less than a fifth.

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, space for pedestrians

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the latest

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a very small percentages

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

184 words

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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?