You recently organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter. -describe the party and how it went -explain why you were pleased with the hotel service. -suggest some improvements that the hotel could make

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to express my gratitude for the excellent

service

provided by your

hotel

during our company's party held

last

monday

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Monday

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. Your team was very wonderful.

Moreover

would provide fast and quality

service

. The party was attended

around

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by around

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one

employees

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employee

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and their families and everyone had a fantastic time. The decorations, food, and drinks

existent

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exist

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. I was

particulary

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particularly

pleased with the

smoth

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smooth

organization

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the event. I think,

everyone

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every

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guests

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guest

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were

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was

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satisfied with

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the

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service

. Of course, I am satisfied with the

service

. I would like to suggest a few improvements that could

further

enhance

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apply

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overall

the experience at your

hotel

Firstly

, it would

great

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be great

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the

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if the

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hotel

could include discounted rates or added

service

tailored to

corpared

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compare

compared

events. Thank you once again for making our party a memorable one. Please convey our appreciation to your entire team for their hard work and dedication we will highly recommend your

hotel

to others in

ours

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our

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business circle. The

auther

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author

of the letters is Tom

that

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the

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"MI" company.

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Grammar

Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and misuses of words/phrases which can slightly disrupt the overall fluency.

Content Detail

Consider elaborating more on specific aspects that made the hotel service pleasing to reinforce your appreciation.

Clarity

For suggestions, aim to be more concise and direct to ensure clarity.

Structure

Your structure and paragraphing effectively convey your points, making the letter easy to follow.

Tone

You have appropriately used formal language and a suitable tone for the context, which enhances the overall impact of your letter.

Appreciation

The expression of gratitude and specific acknowledgment of the hotel's service strengthen your message of appreciation.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

172 words

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The Closing

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