Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, while other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is sometimes argued that
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abroad is an indispensable way
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learning about other countries. I agree with the opinion
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while
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getting
information
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online and on
TV
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can
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help us get familiar with another
country
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. A trip to a new
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can be beneficial
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getting
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knowledge of the place, as we are able to communicate with the local citizens face to face. We may have more chances to get in touch with the local
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when travelling,
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as the salesmen, the hotel managers, and the local tour guides. In the course of chatting, the daily lifestyles and living habits of local citizens can be easily known, thereby helping visitors learn about the real living conditions of the
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in the
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.
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can
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get to know about the
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by visiting the places of historic
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there. By visiting the historical sites and museums,
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might get interested
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the history of the
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, because they can
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to the places the old
people
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used to live and know the details which may not be mentioned on the internet and
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.
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,
people
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who
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to the Palace Museum in Beijing can deeply understand the
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lives of the ancient emperors of China, and be impressed by the enormous power owned by Chinese
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Kings.
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, trips abroad may not be the only way to know things
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a place,
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can
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easily get
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that information
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information
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online and on
TV
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. The advancement of
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the Internet
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contributes to the connection of places on
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.
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people
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can get knowledge and news
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a distant
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on screens without leaving home, which can save their time and budget.
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, the
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soap
operas
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of
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Friends gives us real and
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information
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of
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how
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Americans live.
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,
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there are several budget-sufficient methods
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getting
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of
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an unfamiliar
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,
traveling
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abroad still plays an important role
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the conversations and sightseeing visitors
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during the trips.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction that presents both views and your opinion. Provide a balanced discussion of both viewpoints before concluding with your opinion. Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas and ensure logical flow throughout your essay. Avoid over-generalizations or overly broad statements.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task by discussing both views comprehensively and providing a clear opinion. Expand on your ideas with specific details and examples to support your arguments. Avoid repeating the same ideas and strive to provide unique insights into the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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