In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays,
part
of the world many people tend to change their normal diets to Change preposition
in part
vegetarian
diet. Add an article
a vegetarian
Although
,
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apply
vegetarian
diet can be advantageous for a healthy Add an article
a vegetarian
life style
, it can Correct your spelling
lifestyle
Add a missing verb
be harmfull
harmfull
Correct your spelling
harmful
harmfully
for
the Change preposition
to
body
in many ways due to
lack
of nutrients
. So I believe having normal non-veg meal
can be more beneficial to the human Fix the agreement mistake
meals
body
.
Known
truth is that vegetarian Correct article usage
The known
meals
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
lack
of
certain important Change preposition
apply
nutrients
. For instance
, kind of proteins that
is
helpful Correct subject-verb agreement
are
to strengthen
Change preposition
in strengthening
up
human muscles are not present in these Change preposition
apply
meals
. Meats like beef can be more beneficial in creating hemoglabin
Correct your spelling
haemoglobin
whic
is Correct your spelling
which
mor helpfull
Correct your spelling
more helpful
to absorb
iron Change preposition
in absorbing
to
our Change preposition
in
body
.
Protiens
are more Correct your spelling
Proteins
helpfull
in making Correct your spelling
helpful
human
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the human
body
strong and fit. Due to
this
reason so many fitness couches
Correct your spelling
coaches
also
advice
their Replace the word
advise
meals
with non vegetarian
dishes like beef and eggs to be Add a hyphen
non-vegetarian
more strong
.
Correct word choice
stronger
On the other hand
, leading non vegetarian
Add a hyphen
non-vegetarian
life style
can reduce Correct your spelling
lifestyle
body's
immunity and some people even reduce their Correct article usage
the body's
hemeglobin
level Correct your spelling
haemoglobin
due to
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
nutrients
. As a
example, Anemia is a common condition Change the article
an
between
vegetarian food consumers. Change preposition
among
Also
lot
of them Add an article
a lot
loose
their muscle Replace the word
lose
strenghth
Correct your spelling
strength
due to
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
protien
. Correct your spelling
protein
Also
so many of them present with faintishess
and loss of weight.
In conclusion, being vegetarian can be disadvantageous in many ways because these Correct your spelling
faintish
meals
lacks
some important Change the verb form
lack
nutrients
. So it can be helpful to consume non vegetarian
Add a hyphen
non-vegetarian
meal
to stay strong and healthy.Fix the agreement mistake
meals
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