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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagram illustrates the information regarding the changes in average
house
prices
 in several diverse nations during 1990 and 2002 compared with the average
house
prices
 in 1989.
According to
 the given data, interestingly the proportion of household costs in three cities (New York, Tokyo and London) dropped in 1990-1995 compared to 1989. The rest two cities
have
Wrong verb form
had
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 a
slightly
Change the adverb
slight
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 rise in average
house
prices
 and did not change a lot. Observing the other given details, the index of average
house
prices
 in London soared in
this
 chart (around 12%). Other nations, New York, Madrid, and Frankfurt have increased respectively. In
Tokyo
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Tokyo,
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 we
witnessing
Wrong verb form
witnessed
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 a drop in
prices
 in
this
 period compared to 1989.
To sum up
, the measures of household costs have
a
Correct article usage
apply
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dramatically changed in London in two periods times compared to 1989 (from about -8% to about 12%) and the next rank belonged to New York. The average
house
prices
 have not remarkable changes in these periods compared to 1989.
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