Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Some people believe that
children
should be taught by their families about how to function as useful members of society, Use synonyms
while
others believe that sending kids to educational institutions is the best way for them to study Linking Words
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Although
the latter opinion can be beneficial in some cases, I believe that family upbringing plays a more important role in educating offspring to be good parts of the community.
Schools can be considered suitable places for Linking Words
children
to learn to be good citizens. With standardized educational methods, schools can foster offspring’s cognitive development so that they are able to contribute to society in the future. Use synonyms
For example
, Trung Vuong School and Vinschool are well known for having nurtured successful alumni Linking Words
such
as Professor Ngo Bao, and Professor Nguyen Hung who have devoted their talents to the development of the country. Linking Words
However
, these people only represent a small fraction of the total number of students attending the academy, and Linking Words
thus
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children
to the academy cannot be the best method of educating them to be good members of the community.
I believe that parents play a more important role in teaching them how to be good citizens. In Vietnam, the average class size is 20 students, which makes it difficult for educators to provide proper schooling for each student. One-to-one lessons at home, Use synonyms
on the other hand
, allow Linking Words
children
to progress faster. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, families form stronger bonds with their offspring and Linking Words
thus
, it is easier for them to shape Linking Words
children
’s personalities at an early age. Use synonyms
For example
, by telling stories Linking Words
such
as Robin Hood, and Cinderella before bedtime, parents can instil a sense of compassion and integrity into them. These kids are likely to become good members of the association when they grow up.
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Linking Words
Therefore
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it is clear that
the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After a thorough analysis of Linking Words
this
subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of Linking Words
this
, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.Linking Words
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