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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The graph presents different information
of
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air
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 pollutants in the UK over a six-year period between 1990 and 2005 through four major sources.
Overall
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, the graph totally reveals that the total
air
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 pollutants, an industry, where
air
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 pollution from, continually decreased.
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 households reduced but it
was
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increased
in
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 1996 to 1999
then
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 consistently downward again in 1996.
In contrast
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, the transport seemed like
slowly
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a slowly
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 upward trend. In regard to the total
air
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 pollutants, in 1990 there
was
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 7
million
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tonnes
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 of
the
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air
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 pollution.
This
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 figure reduced relatively stable until 1999 when there were 4
million
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tonnes
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.
Then
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 there was slowly dropped in three years till 2002 there
was
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 only 3.9
million
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tonnes
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. After that time there was quickly downward again to 3
million
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tonnes
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 in 2005.
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, if we look at the transport sources, it seemed gradually increasing,
while
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 the other three sources saw
reducing
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. Another interesting point is that the transport fountainhead
was go
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 down in 1996. After that three years later, it increased carefully
under
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 2
million
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tonne
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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