The graph below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980
The given bar chart provides information about the number of imprisonment in 5 different ( Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United
State
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States
Canada
) countries from 1930 to 1980.
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and Canada
Overall
, the maximum number of imprisonment
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imprisoned
were
in Change the verb form
was
USA
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the USA
at the end
of period
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the period
whereas
the lowest in
Australia throughout the given time. Add a missing verb
was in
Although
every regions
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region
experinced fluctuatons
over the period.
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experienced fluctuations
Initially
, the impriosonment
depicted in Correct your spelling
improvement
chart
for Great Add an article
the chart
a chart
Brtitain
was about 30. But during the Correct your spelling
Britain
trend
Uk witnessed Add a comma
trend,
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a gradually
gradually increased
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gradual increase
theri
numbers. Correct your spelling
their
On the other hand
, Australia's fiigure
was roughly 70 at the Correct your spelling
figure
begining
of the calculations, Correct your spelling
beginning
however
it demonstrated Add a comma
however,
decreased
trend in the year 1980, around 55%, Add an article
a decreased
made
it Change the form of the verb
making
lowest
amongst the countries. Correct article usage
the lowest
In contrast
with Canada, firstly
it accounted for 120 but it is clear that
,
it Remove the comma
apply
also
potrayed
declined trend.
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portrayed
According to
the data, in 1930 New Zealand responsible
for 100, after that it came down nearly 55 in the year 1950, Add a missing verb
was responsible
then
again it climed
up in the next three following year. Correct your spelling
climbed
In addition
, USA
revealed the Correct article usage
the USA
punisment
count was 100 but throughout the period it outraced Correct your spelling
punishment
rest
of the countries.Correct article usage
the rest
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