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Writing Samples
Band 4

A magazine wants to include conservations from its readers for an article called the book that influenced me most Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that employs your must. In your letter Describe what this book was about Explain how this book influenced you Say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you about an article from
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book
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the book
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 it
is
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has
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 influenced me more. As you know the writer kind of
place
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places
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 some
order
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orders
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 in his
book
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, and the famous
book
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 is called Poldark
this
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book
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talked
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talks
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 about
magnificent
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a magnificent
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 model of
soldier
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a soldier
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 his name was Poldark,
while
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 he
is
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was
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 struggling in the
exhausted
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 war and how did he keen in that period. I want to explain how
this
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book
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 has
pretty
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the pretty
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 impact
of
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on
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 us.
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As well as
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Also
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, the men in the huge war
have
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apply
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face some obstacles and they are
front
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in front
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 of the death
,
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 when they are coming from the enemies, that
book
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 taught us how we deal with them to help them if they
came
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come
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 back. I was wondering if there would be at all possible two
assistant
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them
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apply
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when we hold up their picture on the wall, we put all reminiscence
then
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 and it will make us feel nostalgic for them.
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, the government applies
appreciate
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 for them by drawing them on the walls put a stop I thank you for your consideration. Best regards, Monirah

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear and distinct idea, with appropriate supporting details and examples.
coherence cohesion
Develop logical, clear transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow of the letter.
task achievement
Carefully read the task instructions and respond to all parts of the prompt. Your letter should describe the book, explain its influence on you, and consider its potential influence on others.
task achievement
Maintain a tone that is suitable for the intended reader and consistent throughout your piece. It should be formal and respectful, as it is directed to the editor of a magazine.
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