In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Todays
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Today's
people
prefer buying home
and apartment
Fix the agreement mistake
apartments
instead
rent
them. Certainly, Change preposition
of rent
economical
situation Replace the word
economic
play
Change the verb form
plays
important
role Add an article
an important
for
Change preposition
in
this
issue and some people
never can have own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
home
in
any age.
In many countries, Change preposition
at
people
from younghood prefer to seprate
from Correct your spelling
separate
parents
and live independently. Well, sometimes they have Correct pronoun usage
their parents
proper
budget and buy a suitable Add an article
a proper
home
or apartment but sometimes they do not have enough money
, so, they force
to Wrong verb form
are forced
rent
it. But it is a hard condition espicially
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especially
in
Change preposition
at
young
age, because they Correct article usage
a young
prefer
save Add the particle
prefer to
thier
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their
money
for
set up a work or buy other facilities Change preposition
to
such
as,
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apply
car
. Correct article usage
a car
Additionally
, when they renting
Wrong verb form
rent
home
they consume Correct article usage
a home
huge
amount of Add an article
a huge
money
and this
money
never
back to them, it is like Add a missing verb
is never
big
waste of Add an article
a big
money
!
Furthermore
, sometimes wealthy people
that
have many Correct pronoun usage
who
number of
homesCorrect quantifier usage
apply
,
set big Remove the comma
apply
expense
on their homes and Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
rent
them. After that, they just stay at home
and recieve
Correct your spelling
receive
money
, they are
act like a business abuser. Unnecessary verb
apply
For instance
, in my country Iran, Unfortunately, big
Correct article usage
a big
precent
of Correct your spelling
per cent
people
live and rent
a small place in skyscrapers and just few
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a few
amount
of Change to a plural noun
amounts
people
have ability
to Change the article
the ability
buying
even a Wrong verb form
buy
home
for themselves. Consequently
, they prefer
work hard and attempt too much and buy a Add the particle
prefer to
home
rather than rent
it, even be on the
loan for many years!
In conclusion, In my opinion, Having a good Correct article usage
a
home
and car for a convinient
life is Correct your spelling
convenient
a
Correct article usage
apply
necessory
and Correct your spelling
necessary
pay
Wrong verb form
paying
money
rent
for anything in all the years of life can be miserable and
Correct word choice
apply
create
Wrong verb form
creating
a
acceptable life and good Change the article
an
economic
for Replace the word
economy
people
should be important for government
.Correct article usage
the government
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