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Q: SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT EVENTUALLY ALL JOBS WILL BE DONE BY ARTIFICIALLY INTELLIGENT ROBOTS. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION?

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Nowadays, with the advancement of technology people innovate new strategies to ease their work and life.
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 the opinion of the majority, many argue that all employment opportunities will be automated.
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, as there are advantages, I believe, there are a plethora of drawbacks to society and in
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 essay, I will emphasize my opinion with examples. First of all, many jobs in the modern world require not only skills and experience but
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 human empathy and creativity.
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, the professions in the aged care category have to deal with adults who need love and affection and
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, and caring should be done gently. If robots play the role of a carer those machinery cannot succeed in their work as humans.
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, automated Professionals cannot handle aggressive residents in care settings as they only have repetitive skills, and not the creativity to handle situations.
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, If all job types are invaded by robots, it can lead to an increase in the unemployment rate in the country.
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, if a company is fully automated from the
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 to management post, which previously had a full human
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 force, those workers should go for other options to find jobs and to make their living.
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 of joblessness, many negative impacts will arise in the community like rising crime rates, shoplifting, and
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, causing depression as people are always in stressful conditions.
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 there are disadvantages, introducing robots has several positive impacts too.
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, in my mind, I believe human-AI collaboration can lead to a plus mark in the modern job market rather than converting human force to Artificial Intelligence. In conclusion, some people believe AI will replace human
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, but it cannot be done as the authorities know the consequences of that on citizens and the way it indirectly impacts the government.
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When discussing your opinion on the given topic, ensure that you fully develop your main ideas. Consider exploring why you believe human-AI collaboration would be beneficial and provide clear examples or scenarios where this has been or could be successful.
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To improve the logical sequence and clarity of your essay, focus on creating smooth transitions between your paragraphs and within them as well. Utilize cohesive devices effectively, matching them to the logic of your argument. Also, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea which is expanded upon.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificially Intelligent (AI)
  • Automation
  • Job displacement
  • Human empathy
  • Creativity
  • Intuition
  • Repetitive tasks
  • Economic implications
  • Government regulation
  • Job opportunities
  • Human labor
  • Job market
  • Acquire skills
  • Human-AI collaboration
  • Hybrid roles
  • Ethical implications
  • Societal structure
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