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The graph shows the hours spent in different study methods during a two year course

The graph shows the hours spent in different study methods during a two year course
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The graph below illustrates time taken in the learning methods which are
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internet
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the internet
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, library,lectures and
classes
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 during a
two year
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 course.
Overall
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, the
hours
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 that were spent studying using the
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internet
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Internet
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 rose dramatically whilst,the time that was used for learning through lecturers and
classes
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 dropped moderately. There was a slight decrease
on
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in
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 the total number of
hours
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 that
was
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were
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 used
by
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in
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 both semester one and semester two.
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, the duration spent learning
by
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via
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 the
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internet
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Internet
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 rose swiftly and it
also
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 remained constant but
hours
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 used attending lecturers and
classes
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 remained the same.
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,there was a dramatic downfall
on
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in
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 the time taken
acquring
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acquiring
 knowledge by attending
lecturers
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lectures
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 and
classes
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as well as
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 going to
library
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the library
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.
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However
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However,
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 the
hours
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 spent on the
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internet
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Internet
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 rose swiftly in the second year.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, classes, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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