In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

Nowadays, most
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the
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people think that
first
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child
should come the their family in when they are mature
old
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.
This
idea has become
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in all over the world and it has
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along some negative and positive situations. I partly agree with
this
opinion and I will explain my perspective with some
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and more details. First and foremost, in modern times, many
women
work all their lives and start their
career
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at an early age. These
women
do not want things which are
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for
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their career and
life
balance.
Furthermore
, they think
about
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that, having a
baby
is significantly responsible and
require
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interest during all
life
for
this
reason the
women
postpone
this
idea and they consider that the correct time is approximately
thirtyfive
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thirty-five
thirty five
or forty years old for
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a infant.
However
,
this
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considerable problems
such
as
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gap, old
mother
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body problems,
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patience
for
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parents. These issues can not
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after birth.
For example
, a mother who has her first
child
at the age of forty cannot do
this
activity with her
child
15 years later because she will complain of muscle pains when her
child
wants to ride a bicycle with her, and the absence of these activities that will benefit the
child
's development creates a sad result for both of them.
On the other hand
, parents who have a late
baby
may be more caring towards their children.
This
is because they have already reached the career step they have targeted in their working
life
and have more time to spare for their children.
For instance
,
according to
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by Cyprus University poll, it has been found that
women
who become mothers later in
life
feel more financially comfortable and are much more grateful and happy when they have a
baby
. In conclusion, being a late parent has some advantages
as well as
disadvantages.
Although
it is very difficult to decide when the right time
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my opinion, both parents should have a
baby
when they are mature enough to be responsible, not later or earlier.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Shift
  • Trend
  • Societal norms
  • Education and career
  • Financial stability
  • Reproductive technologies
  • Delayed marriages
  • Parenting responsibilities
  • Life expectancy
  • Family planning
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