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Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. However, it is longer the main form of transport. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population?

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Less noise or no pollution means of transportation can be considered to cycling but it is not widely used as the major means of travelling. The essay will discuss its reasons and the possible ways to motivate audiences worldwide. The main reasons behind these are more
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-consuming and much effort. As bicycles do not run on any fuel they have no engines installed.
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, their pace does not guarantee people to take them to a particular place on
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. That's why they do not prefer cycling and are obliged to use other fastest means of transportation
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 as cars, buses, trains, and so on.
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, running a cycle
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 requires physical strength which the majority of people find boring. They do not have enough
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 they are lazy to ride their bike and choose other alternatives. The two possible ways could be providing awareness programmes
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 and again and segregating cycling lanes into multiple places. When they are informed or educated about the importance of using the cycle as a means of moving from one place to another which does no harm to the environment and
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 has certain health benefits
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 it might help widespread cycle users.
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, in cities where most population use engine vehicles, there must be separate lanes for cycling so that they would be able to ride in their own lane safely.
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, slowly they might shift from luxurious rides to cycling.
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, cycling takes more
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 and physical effort so people are forced to use another convenient way of transportation and in order to overcome
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 there should be enough separate lanes and the younger generation should be given positive lessons about the positive impact of using eco-friendly vehicles.
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Coherence and Cohesion
Develop paragraphs with a clear central idea, ensuring that each paragraph expands on a single aspect of the question. Use a range of linking words to show the relationship between ideas.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task thoroughly. You mentioned reasons and possible solutions, but the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. Expand on the ideas with more detailed examples and explanations to improve clarity and depth.
Task Achievement
Include relevant, specific examples to support your main points. This strengthens your argument and demonstrates a comprehensive understanding of the topic. Generic statements should be substantiated with concrete examples.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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