IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words. 1. Option A: Cultural fest: This could include various cultural performances and setting up of food stalls of different cultural cuisines.

#option #choice #fest #performances #food #stalls #cuisines
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
I was recently made aware of a survey on the school's annual function. The authority provided two themes shortlisted.
while
Linking Words
 some teachers claim that a cultural fest is a good option others say sports met is more suitable for students, considering multifare reasons, which I will educate and justify in the following paragraph. No doubt that a cultural fest will be a more suitable option with multiple thoughts. Will schedule cultural performances for students with good dress and makeovers with different cultures. that will be more interesting. Primarily, will create a group and decide a cultural theme.
Secondly
Linking Words
, On school grounds will see
food
Use synonyms
 stacks of different cultural cuisines. Linke canines, Indian, south Indian, continent, japnes
this
Linking Words
 all most different
food
Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
 annual education is different
for
Change preposition
from
show examples
last
Linking Words
 year was
sports
Correct article usage
a sports
show examples
 meet and different races and activities were done.
Additionally
Linking Words
, to support my option I would like to mention that will give
this
Linking Words
 opportunity to parents they prepare
food
Use synonyms
 and make a stall will decide some price. who will be making good quality and tasty
food
Use synonyms
 will provide
price
Add an article
a price
the price
show examples
. pregnant will be happy they will
also
Linking Words
 enjoy
this
Linking Words
 every with kinds. Considering all the above assertions I would like to vouch for the cultural event as
ideal
Correct article usage
an ideal
show examples
opection
Correct your spelling
option
 to move forward.
Submitted by t.akanksha.mba on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Make sure that each paragraph has a central idea and that the paragraphs logically follow one another.
task achievement
Focus on developing main points that directly address the prompt. Provide specific examples to support your choice and explain why cultural fest is your preferred option.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: