The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009.
The line graphs compare the total expenditure and
revenue
on trading activities between Australia, China, Japan, and United
States for five consecutive years.
Correct article usage
the United
Overall
, Australia had the highest revenue
from its transaction with Japan, meanwhile
the highest expenses came from the imported commodities from the United States.
In 2004, Add a comma
meanwhile,
Correct article usage
the Australia
Australia
government allocated around 18 Correct your spelling
Australian
billion
A$ for importing goods from China, while
received
in return for about 12 Wrong verb form
receiving
billion
A$ through selling their goods to China. The number gradually increased, until in 2008 crossed the
similar amount Correct article usage
a
for
30 Change preposition
of
billion
A$ just before the expenses for imported things went
Verb problem
apply
plateau
and the income from exported things surpassed it in the following year.
Wrong verb form
plateaued
On the other hand
, the revenue
from exporting commodities to Japan valued
Add a missing verb
is valued
in
more than 20 Change preposition
at
billion
A$ which in
the same number allocated by the Australian government to buy products from the United States. The export activity Correct your spelling
is
revenue
and import activity expenditure for both countries gradually increased and similarly
reached its
peak in 2008 Correct pronoun usage
their
for
45 Change preposition
at
billion
A$ and 25 billion
A$ respectively before decline
in 2009.Wrong verb form
declining
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