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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.
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depicts
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 the
sales
 of
Fairtrade labelled
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Fairtrade-labelled
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 coffee and bananas in five different countries (UK,
Switzerland
,
Denmark
,
Sweden
 and
Beligium
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Belgium
)
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that coffee
sales
 always increased in
span
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the span
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 of 5 years,
meanwhile
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 the demand for bananas in some
coutries
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countries
 namely
Sweden
 and
Denmark
 had a downward tendency. Turning to the details,
switzerland
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Switzerland
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 was the
lead
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leader
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 in
Coffee
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the Coffee
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fairtrade
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Fairtrade
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 with
total
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the total
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 amount of 3
million
 in 1999, but it got replaced by
UK
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the UK
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that
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which
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make
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made
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 up 20
million
sales
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in sales
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 in 2004. In a given period,
Denmark
 and
Sweden
 had equal
increased
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of
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in
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sales
 roughly about 0.2
million
. Moving to the second table, it experience different
pattern
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patterns
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. In 1999
Switzerland
 constitute15
million
 of bananas
sales
 and in 2004 it
constitute
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constituted
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 47
million
.
Switzerland
 is the highest country in banana
sales
.
Nonetheless
, UK and Belgium
consitutively
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constitutively
consecutively
was
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were
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 right behind.
However
,
Sweden
 and
Denmark
sales
 went down noticeably. Belgium had a drop
roughly
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of roughly
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 0.8
million
 compared to 1999, and
Denmark
 had a fall
about
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of about
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 1
million
 euros.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, switzerland, denmark, sweden, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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