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The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the drinking habits in per cent in the US with the age parameter.
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divided
to
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wich
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which
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starts
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 with 16 and
ends
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 with 74.
Overall
, people who never were drinker have
main
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the main
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 proportion but it falls in the during years.
Also
, number of the ex-
drinkers
rise
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in
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after the age of 45.
Primarly
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Primarily
, the folks who are not a drinker are the major shares in each bracket and the maximum number of
that is
 in the
fisrt
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first
 bar with around 60 per cent.
However
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 it drops to
near
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 45 per cent in the 65-74 years range.
In contrast
, people
that
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who
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 are
ex-drinker
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ex-drinkers
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have a dramatic increase in percentage end of during life
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lifetime
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.
On the other hand
, heavy
drinkers
 and light
drinkers
 fluctuate in each bracket.The
higest numeber
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highest number
 of heavy
drinkers
 is in the
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.light
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Light
drinkers
 are part of society which
are
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 in the
begining
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beginning
 of adultness.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words drinkers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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