You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * Explain why you changed jobs * Describe your new job * Tell him/her your other news.
Dear Amir,
I hope you and your family are great. I’m writing
this
letter to you to share my feelings with you about starting a new position in a new company. You know that I’ve been seeking to apply for a new job for a long time.
By the way, as you know I worked in Greenweb holding as a graphic designer and worked there overtime, nonetheless
they paid me a lower salary Add a comma
nonetheless,
then
, so I decided to look for a job at another company, even city
. So I started searching on the Internet on my Linkedin and sent an email Correct article usage
a city
for
all companies which related to my field. After a couple of weeks, one company accepted my resume and gave me an appointment for an interview. Change preposition
to
Then
I showed my design to the manager, then
they hired me. I am over the moon right now because they gave me a higher level of last
position that I had.
Actually, I’m a Senior Graphic Designer and Change the article
the last
also
my salary is much more than the last
.
In addition
, I’m planning a gathering and making dinner because My cousin arrived yesterday from Canada and he is planning to stay here for 2 weeks. I've invited him to dinner for this
weekend and I am going to be thrilled that you join us.
I hope to see you soon.
Warm wishes,
MustafaSubmitted by mustafaabedinasab on
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Coherence & Cohesion
Although the letter has a clear structure, try to organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure there is logical progression between your ideas and paragraphs to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
The letter covers all tasks but could improve in expanding on the reasons for job change and providing more details on the new position.
Task Achievement
Maintain a consistent level of formality throughout the letter, avoiding language that is too casual for semi-formal letter-writing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite