You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * Explain why you changed jobs * Describe your new job * Tell him/her your other news.

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Dear Amir, I hope you and your family are great. I’m writing

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letter to you to share my feelings with you about starting a new position in a new company. You know that I’ve been seeking to apply for a new job for a long time. By the way, as you know I worked in Greenweb holding as a graphic designer and worked there overtime,

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nonetheless

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they paid me a lower salary

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, so I decided to look for a job at another company, even

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a city

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. So I started searching on the Internet on my Linkedin and sent an email

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all companies which related to my field. After a couple of weeks, one company accepted my resume and gave me an appointment for an interview.

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I showed my design to the manager,

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they hired me. I am over the moon right now because they gave me a higher level of

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last

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position that I had. Actually, I’m a Senior Graphic Designer and

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my salary is much more than the

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, I’m planning a gathering and making dinner because My cousin arrived yesterday from Canada and he is planning to stay here for 2 weeks. I've invited him to dinner for

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weekend and I am going to be thrilled that you join us. I hope to see you soon. Warm wishes, Mustafa

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Coherence & Cohesion

Although the letter has a clear structure, try to organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences.

Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure there is logical progression between your ideas and paragraphs to enhance readability.

Task Achievement

The letter covers all tasks but could improve in expanding on the reasons for job change and providing more details on the new position.

Task Achievement

Maintain a consistent level of formality throughout the letter, avoiding language that is too casual for semi-formal letter-writing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

229 words

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