Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
global
life
, we have to understand that unfortunate situations are
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avoided
. It occurred
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any time that unpredictable, but the important thing is how we embrace
this
truth and what the measures for
this
is it.
While
some
people
believe that they should accept them as a part of their
life
, others would try to improve
such
a bad phenomenon.
This
essay will discuss both
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to prove that acceptance is a better way to have a well-being
life
. On the one hand, learning how to
accecpt
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accept
a fact will help young
people
to improve themselves during maturation. A typical example is that a colleague is now working in a big company, having a good job but her colleagues always be despised and teased so she decides to change his job.
However
, if he still changes his job like
this
, he may become unemployed. We can understand that there are many
misfortune
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in
life
, but if we don’t accept our
defect
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, we will never have a well-being
life
.
On the other hand
, sometimes there are some situations
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passed but we cannot overcome
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no matter how hard we try. A serious accident is a great example
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this
argument. Nowadays, there are many accidents
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each year. In some cases, there is no
injure
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after that, but some of them are
unfortunately
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because
that
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accidents
has
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taken the
life
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of many
people
and some
people
become disabled for the rest of their
life
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.
Although
they live positively, the consequences will still follow them all
life
. In conclusion, we can see that not every bad
circumstances
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are
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solved by improvement,
however
, it is better way to accept the fact
then
we will develop every day to make
life
better.
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Ensure that the essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to connect ideas and enable the text to flow smoothly. Avoid using them inappropriately.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points with specific details and examples. Provide relevant examples to support your ideas.
task achievement
Address the task by discussing both views and providing your own opinion clearly throughout the essay, especially in the conclusion.
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Ideas should be clearly explained, fully extended and supported by evidence or examples.
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Make sure to provide relevant and specific examples to underline your arguments. Avoid vague statements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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