Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers ,should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that experts should work in their own
country
while
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others believe in
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freedom
for choosing
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their workplace.
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essay will consider both
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of the statement.
Overall
, in my perspective, choosing a place for
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a career is one of the fundamental human rights and it should not be limited.
To begin
with,
according to
some, as the government allocate a great deal of money to training professionals, they are expected to assist
developing
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their own society rather than immigrating
to
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overseas and helping
another communities
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.
However
, if adequate infrastructures not be provided for finding or running decent jobs it would not be possible to restrict educated workers in their
country
. Imagine a doctor who
had
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studied intensively but is not able to afford an office ,
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a reasonable job offer in another
country
,including all accommodations and
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salary, is recommended to them. In
this
situation, accepting that position would be definitely a logical decision.
On the contrary
, some believe that human beings are expected to be free to work wherever they wish.
In other words
, putting pressure on people
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in their own
country
without considering their basic rights and requirements not only is not moral but
also
can be a fruitless exercise. Since individuals are likely not to act efficiently in a
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condition
and
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it will result in
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and unproductive Society.
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, a
studios
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young engineer ,who has graduated recently and is eager to take part in international projects, would be disappointed if could not achieve their goal. In conclusion,
while
people may vary in their opinion in case of choosing another
country
for doing
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, I think that it should be unlimited
due to
the individual’s obvious right of freedom and pursuing dream.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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