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The diagram below shows how rocks are created and destroyed in the rock cycle

The diagram below shows how rocks are created and destroyed in the rock cycle
#rocks #rock #cycle
the graph depicts how rocks are created and crushed in the
some
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same
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 earth layers in the
rock
 cycle.
overall
, it can be seen that the rocks
consists
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consist
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 of different
type
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types
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 in each
layers
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layer
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 of earth, those are Igneous
rock
, metamorphic
rock
, and sedimentary
rock
. 
the Magma
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The magma
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 is pushed to the
high
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height
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 of the mountain. when it
contacs
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contacts
contact
 with air the lava will
be cools
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 quickly and become Igneous
rock
. when
the
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rain
is happened
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,
this
rock
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is release
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release
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released
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 into
sub surface
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subsurface
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 water and
become
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becomes
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 a sedimentary
rock
. time by time
this
 sedimentary
rock
 will sink to the deep surface because of high pressure and temperature and become metamorphic
rock
. in the long
periode
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period
, it will be melted and become Magma. all the process is integrated
in
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 a cycle.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rock with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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