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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The demonstrated two maps illustrate the development and the variations that were conducted in the
museum
 in 1998 and a decade later. In general, there were many changes and improvements implemented in the
museum
,
although
 the old
rooms
were
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still exist.
To begin
 with, in 1998, there
was
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 three permanent exhibition
rooms
 and seven other different
rooms
.
Moreover
, two
rooms
 of permanent exhibition were located on the right side,
while
 the third one was situated in the left corner of the
museum
.
On the other hand
, in 2008, some changes were implemented on the west side of the
museum
like
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 the shop and bags and coats
room
 moved into the
south west
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 corner of it.
However
,
toilet’s
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 place was
also
 vary. In 2008, it was situated next to the cafe which is located in the north.
In addition
, the largest
room
 which was located in the
center
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 of the
museum
,
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 was developed with some
adding
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 facilities,
such
 as
cafe
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a cafe
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 sitting zone and fountains.
Furthermore
, on the left side, two
room
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rooms
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 were added. In the north left corner, there was a restaurant and in the
middle
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 there was a new
room
 erected called temporary exhibition.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, rooms, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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