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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first graph depicts the percentage of
households
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households'
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 usage of three items
of
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washing machine refrigerator and
vaccum
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vacuum
 cleaner
in
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during a period of 80 years in a particular country
as well as
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 the number of hours per week
were
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spent on housework are shown in the second chart.
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, as it can be seen the highest level of expenditure belonged to refrigerators in 1980,
while
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 they experienced the lowest level in 1920.
According to
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machine
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machines
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 increased dramatically from the early
every
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two decades. (from 0 to100% from on 19200)
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 based on the given data in the second chart, the number of hours which were allocated to chores
such
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 as
:
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washing clothes ,preparing meals and cleaning decreased gradually from 50 per
of
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a
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week to a bit more than 10 hours from 1920 to 2019.
To sum up
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,
although
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 refrigerators were the second item for consumption in 1920,afterwards
vaccim
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vacuum
 cleaner and washing
machine
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machines
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 exceeded
a
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noticeable expenditures in the later years.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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