In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
The number of citizens in central cities
are
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is
due to
people who move to them from the countryside. In point of view, Linking Words
this
progress has both positive and negative benefits.
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Firstly
, dwelling in developed towns is extra beneficial for those who live in the countryside. The reason is they will have plenty of opportunities to set their career. Linking Words
For instance
, there are lots of modern activities, courses and sports training centres all around cities. Linking Words
In addition
, they can find hospitals, schools and other facilities nearby which can provide a comfortable life for them. Linking Words
However
, they can be faced with housing problems Linking Words
due to
the high price of apartments.
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On the other hand
, decreasing the number of population in the area away from the city and increasing in urban areas may cause several problems. To give an example, several resources Linking Words
such
as water, food and raw materials might be in shortage Linking Words
due to
huge demand among new and old populations. Linking Words
Furthermore
, in rural areas Linking Words
due to
the declining population, some of the factories and offices will lose their employees which can even lead to the end of the business. Linking Words
Moreover
, it can lead to Linking Words
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high prices among Verb problem
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daily
products because of the low number of producers. If production is not encouraged percentage of imports will see rice Correct your spelling
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while
exports decline, which will affect Linking Words
to
the budget of the countryside badly.
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To sum up
, it is not clear that moving to cities is a positive or negative development. Because, Linking Words
while
there is damage to the economy of rural areas, Linking Words
however
, it is helpful for migrants.Linking Words
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