You recently booked a part time course at a college, You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to your college administrator. In your letter Say which part time course you’ve booked. explain why you need to cancel your booking ask about booking a different course. Begin as : Dear Sir or Madam
Dear Sir,
I hope
this
email finds you in good health and you are doing well. I am writing this
letter to cancel the course
that I booked at your reputed college.
To begin
with, I am Thomas Cook and I am from Toronto, Canada. Because of high
demand in the apparel manufacturing sector, recently, I enrolled in a part-time Correct article usage
the high
course
on "Supply Chain Management" which will be commencing from
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the
next week.
Since most of the classes will be held in the evening in Correct article usage
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this
four-month-long certification course
, it will be a little bit difficult for me to maintain the schedule as I got a part-time job as a supply chain analyst in a multinational company where my duty hour is from 4 pm to 10 pm.
As far as I am concerned, there is another certification course
on "Strategic Management" which will be going to start in the next month. Hence
, I am very much interested in enrolling on this
course
as all classes of this
course
will be held in the morning time. Therefore
, you are requesting to book this
course
.
I look forward to hearing from you soon regarding the booking of the new course
.
Yours faithfully,
Shai HopeSubmitted by faisalmahamood on
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Task Achievement
Ensure that you begin your letter with the appropriate salutation, 'Dear Sir or Madam,' as per the prompt, rather than 'Dear Sir,' unless you are certain of the recipient's gender. This will help you adhere more closely to the task requirements.
Task Achievement
Your reason for cancelling and your request for booking a different course are clear and concise, which is excellent. To score higher in task achievement, you could elaborate a bit more on your interest in the 'Strategic Management' course, explaining why you believe it suits your needs or career goals better (beyond scheduling), which would provide a more complete response.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a logical flow, moving smoothly from the introduction, to explaining the reason for cancellation, and then to requesting enrollment in a different course. To further improve coherence and cohesion, consider adding a brief concluding sentence to summarize your request or express hope for a positive outcome.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make use of a variety of transition words to smooth the progression from one idea to the next. While your letter does progress logically, phrases like 'Moreover,' 'As a result,' or 'Consequently' in appropriate places can enrich the text's connective tissue.