Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

I agree that some
people
prefer to live in small
towns
whilst others prefer to live in big
cities
.
According to
me, living in a small
town
has its advantages
than
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living in big
cities
. In
this
essay
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I will be mentioning reasons and details to support my answer.
People
who prefer to live in small
towns
usually love to stay there as it is very calm compared to living in the
city
. Small
towns
are now developed and have almost all the facilities that a big
city
has. They have good hospitals,
grocercery
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grocery
stores, malls, movie theatres, etc.
Although living
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in the
city
has everything right in the corner and is easily accessible anywhere and at any time. The big
cities
are
usualy
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usually
too
corwded
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crowded
and noisy
during
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anytime
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of the day
whereas
,
on the other hand
, small
towns
are peaceful to live in and
is
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not
over crowded
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. An article that was written by Thomas Welston in the year 1998,
also
proves that 85% of
people
prefer to live in smaller
towns
compared to those living in the big
cities
. I believe that
,
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it depends from person to person where they prefer to live depending on their needs and circumstances.
For instance
, some
people
may prefer living in smaller
towns
but
due to
their
work
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work,
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they have to move to the
city
as it will be easy for them to travel to work. The same applies to
people
who prefer to live in the
city
but they have to move to a smaller
town
to either look after their family or for various other reasons including work.
Therefore
, I believe that most
of
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the
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people
prefer to live in a smaller
town
due to
the reasons I have stated in the above paragraphs. In conclusion, living in a smaller
town
can be calming to an
individuals
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life and can be
stress free
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stress-free
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for some
people
.
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