The maps underneath describes the changes that have taken place in and around Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960 till 2000

The maps illustrate the blueprint in the Queen Mary Hospital

neighborhood

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between 1960 and 2000. The Queen Mary Hospital's neighborhood has been developing into a health-center area since 1960 and it has become less greener.

However

, between 1980 and 2000, the changes in the blueprint only happened in the size of the building, As seen in the maps, in 1980, the shopping

center

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was replaced by a cancer

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and pharmacy

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close to the hospital.

Moreover

, the farmland which is located next to the car park was changed into a nursing

school

. In 2000, there were no changes in the number and type of buildings around the Queen Mary Hospital.

However

, there were differences in some building areas. The cancer

center

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was developed and took the place of the nursing

school

. In the results, the nursing

school

building was half smaller compared to 1980.

Furthermore

, the car park area decreased, and half of the place was replaced by the nursing

school

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1Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

162 words

7.00

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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The maps underneath describes the changes that have taken place in and around Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960 till 2000

It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

Financial education should be included as a mandatory subject in schools to prepare students for managing money effectively. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.