Developed countries have created many environment problems in the world , particularly in their contribution to global warming. Why is global warming a problem? What can be done to reduce the danger of global warming?

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created multitudes of environmental issues globally
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global warming. There are
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reasons
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this
and the upcoming essays will
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solution
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problem. There are multiple reasons for
this
. One of the major is the surge in the number of vehicles on the road which
release
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toxic gases
such
as methane and other gases which combine with air and become a cause of air pollution.
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, these fumes
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the ozone layer, a protective covering for us.
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, exposed to harmful
radiatons
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radiations
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and vulnerable to many chronic diseases
such
as cancer and other cardiovascular diseases.
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Ensure the introduction fully paraphrases the task question and presents a clear thesis statement outlining the essay structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop clear paragraphs with distinct main ideas and supporting sentences. Each paragraph should revolve around a single topic with well-explained points.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to create a more sophisticated and formal tone. Avoid repetitive words and phrases to enhance the readability of your essay.
Task Achievement
In the conclusion, reiterate your thesis statement and summarise your main points concisely. Provide closure to the reader on the topic discussed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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