Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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languages have been
demonished
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demolished
admonished
in recent years and
according to
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it will inevitably result in convenience across the globe. In my perspective it can be considered as a
possitive
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positive
devolopment
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development
,
therefore
I completely agree with the statement.
Following
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essay will discuss
this
notion.
To begin
with, the same
language
in one country may cause closeness and easy communication between residents
as well as
tourists who visit that place.
For example
, in
Iran
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Iran,
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people
speak
differentely
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differently
in each part. Farsi,Turkish and Kurdish are the most famous ones which are spoken in Iran
besides
the
differency
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difference
differences
in dialects.
As a result
,
people
may face much trouble in communicating since most individuals in small cities just are able to speak in their own local tongue.
Therefore
, not only
people
of other cities but
also
forign
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foreign
visiters
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visitors
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may have difficulty in talking with local
inhabbitants
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inhabitants
.
On the other hand
, fewer
language
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languages
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may
leads
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to comfort and development internationally. When there are fewer
language
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languages
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to learn, more
people
will be enthusiastic about being in touch with foreigners as a friend or even a
busieness
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business
counterpart. In
this
way, more international contacts and
trades
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trade
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will occur.
Although
,
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by
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learning
english
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this
aim is nearly achievable, an identical global
language
may cause making
less
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efforts
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task achievement
While you have addressed the prompt, your development of ideas lacks depth and breadth. Make sure to explore the implications of language extinction more fully, discussing both sides of the argument before reaching a conclusion. Support your stance with varied and more nuanced examples and explanations, so your essay does not oversimplify the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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