There has been major advances in technology over the recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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changed
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life
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seen,
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changes were some kind of developments, which
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improved
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life
and made living easier than past. In
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of the best things that
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advancements
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science
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evelution
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evolution
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transportation
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positively
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, in 1900 if
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one
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the
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another city he had to walk or ride a horse and
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3 months of his
life
, but today if another person wants to travel between cities he can use
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a train
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which is faster and
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cheaper
. I can see that
,
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this
new
invention
made good changes for humanity and because of that
trasportation
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transportation
became faster and easier. Another good change which
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by
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changed
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one
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was
invention
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the invention
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of the internet.
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is
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humanity's
biggest
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. To give just a single example, I can just mention in the past when a person wanted to send a
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message
to
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one
he had to pay for paper post and he had to write it, but right now that person has to use his phone
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what he
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then
just send it.
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is a huge
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evolution
for every single human.
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of the internet
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changed all of
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the lives
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on
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planet
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and for the
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. in conclusion in
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or two past decades
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really gone far and
this
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advancement
made
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difference in
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people's
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lifes
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.
on
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my opinion
this
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the best
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results
such
as faster and
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cheaper
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transportation and more important than that the internet came to be,
this
massive
invention
made society's
life
really easy. To be honest
this
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advancement
is not always good like when
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produce
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weapens
such
as
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atomic bombs which can kill
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many people
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one
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had power I would
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disappear
this
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technology
. After
all
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advancement is
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important and good thing to happen for
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