There has been major advances in technology over the recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The essay lacks clear and coherent structure. It is important to have a clear thesis statement in your introduction and topic sentences for each paragraph that directly address the essay question. Make sure to organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea that is expanded upon with supporting sentences.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present but they need to be more developed. The introduction should clearly state your position on the topic, and the conclusion should succinctly summarize your main points and restate your position.

coherence cohesion

There is an attempt to support main points with examples, but they need to be more specific and directly relevant to the question. Studies, statistics, or more detailed hypothetical scenarios will strengthen your argument.

task achievement

The response is somewhat complete but the ideas presented are not always clear or comprehensive. Ensure that you fully address the task by presenting your viewpoint on the extent to which you agree or disagree, and by discussing both sides of the argument if appropriate.

task achievement

The essay drifts into general statements without fully explaining or elaborating on ideas. Aim to clearly articulate your ideas and explore them in depth to demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.

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The examples provided are not always relevant or specific enough to the topic. Make sure to include examples that directly support your position and show a clear link to the argument you are making.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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