The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studiying full-time or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studiying full-time or part-time.
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The bar graph illustrates the
number
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of
people
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in
the
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tertiary education whether they were full-time
students
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or part-time
students
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according to
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their
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in Britain from 1970 to 1991.
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, both males and females mostly studied as part-time
students
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throughout the
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,
however
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, the
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of individuals
studied
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who studied
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as full-time
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increased gradually over time.  In
Britain
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Britain,
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both men and women predominantly studied as part-time
students
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throughout the
period
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. Between 1970 and 1971, there were about 1 million males that were working as part-time
students
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in Britain which slightly decreased to around 870
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students
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before inclining to approximately 900
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in the season of 1990/91. The
number
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of women who had part-time education was just below 800
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people
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in the beginning and
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gradually rose to almost 1.2 million individuals, ending the entire
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at the highest point. 
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who had full-time education
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always a minority of the population for both genders. The
number
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of males and females that studied as full-time
students
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increased gradually over time and these values varied between around 50
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people
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and about 300
thousand
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individuals over the entire
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, students, period, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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