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Ambition is a positive quality for people to have in society today. How important is it for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

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In
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 matter, clearly, can solve more problems than creating. To achieve a clear picture;
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broader
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 context. It is
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 believed that desires can generate some attitudes that help people try harder to achieve what they want. It, indeed, brings about new demands which can create fresh ideas to catch
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 desires.
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, these new ideas might lead to efforts and efforts usually have satisfying results. It can,
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, increase the living standards of humans, because
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 of human beings usually want more and they never lose their appetite for wanting more, which
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 of life. Entrepreneurs who achieved whatever they
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wanted and now make podcasts are
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 case in point. They always advise people to have plans and ideas, but before
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 they should have big wishes.
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 some people see
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merits far
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outweigh
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 that great wishes give individuals confidence, which makes them look both attractive and charming.
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 can contribute to a high chance of success at
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 interview,
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. A salient point here is that an ambitious man not only has a better chance at
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 can be a better lover, indeed. Women, most of the
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, prefer someone with big dreams who can gain everything, and
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 are more charming in female's eyes. In conclusion, desires have been proven as an inseparable part of humans'
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, which can help them to become successful more easily.
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 ambition is completely beneficial for
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.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a distinct main idea, and transitions between paragraphs need to be smooth to ensure logical flow.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction should set the stage for your argument and clearly state your position on the topic. Avoid ambiguous statements and clearly define the scope of the discussion in your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Support each main point with specific examples and explanations. While you have touched upon some general benefits of ambition, incorporating more detailed examples and concrete evidence would strengthen your points.
Task Achievement
Ensure that your essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt. While you have discussed the positive aspects of ambition, the essay would benefit from a balanced view that includes potential drawbacks, as the prompt asks for a discussion on whether it's a positive or negative characteristic.
Task Achievement
Strive to articulate your ideas clearly and comprehensively. Refine complex sentences for better clarity and make sure that every sentence contributes to your overall argument.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driving force
  • personal growth
  • professional growth
  • career advancement
  • resilience
  • setbacks
  • societal progress
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • ethical considerations
  • life satisfaction
  • burnout
  • unethical behavior
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