People think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that there are other alternative solutions for reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion on this topic.

Some individuals imagine that lengthy judicial
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can deter potential criminals. Others believe in restorative justice through other forms of sentencing.
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essay will discuss both views before outlining my opinion. A widely held view among people is that tougher
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are effective in reducing
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. It is believed that the harsh conditions experienced in longer imprisonment can be useful in preventing people from committing crimes.
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, in the event that long-serving prisoners are released, their chances of re-offending are very minimal.
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, it is sometimes argued that the reason for rising traffic offences in the world is that these usually come with non-stringent punishments.
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, giving harsher punishments to traffic offenders is considered a reasonable solution. Another school of thought is that long-term
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only instil fear without encouraging any typical mindset and behaviour change.
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positive behaviour change specialists, meaningful changes can only be achieved when criminals come to the point of independently deciding to change.
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is when they become remorseful and accept restorative activities,
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as education and skills development, counselling, and community service. When implemented correctly, these alternative solutions can be ideal in reducing
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. My opinion is that a balanced approach is required. Punishments should continue to be given based on the weight of the
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-- in a legally fair and unbiased manner.
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means assessing the offenders and their crimes to ascertain their socioeconomic and legal needs to be fully restored and
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society. In conclusion, some people think that the best way to reduce
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is to give longer prison
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. Others believe that alternative solutions are more effective in reducing
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. I argue that judicial
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discretion
should be used in passing prison
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to ensure that the legal system remains fair.

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Add more clear, real examples to show how each view works in real life.
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Make one idea in each paragraph and use linking words to tie ideas, like 'and', 'but', 'so'.
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position
State your view in a clear line in the end of the intro or the end of the essay so the reader sees it.
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Clear plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
idea
Shows balance by giving both views and a view of your own.
coherence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • habitual offenders
  • retribution
  • rehabilitation
  • overcrowding
  • recidivism
  • community service
  • restorative justice
  • crime prevention programs
  • youth mentorship
  • neighborhood watch
  • justice system
  • re-offending
  • financial strain
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