Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There are some who believe we should separate I agree we really need to separate
students
according to
their academic ability, while
others consider we need to teach all students
together. In my opinion, it is beneficial to educate students
together, however
Add a comma
,
students
' classes based on their academic ability. Because,
it will help them Remove the comma
apply
according to
what they need and also
it makes them improve their ability.
Students
getting along together is good to teach them how to communicate and interact with each other. Communication will impact their behavior and also
social skills so
Correct word choice
apply
that
encourages them to become leaders or members .
Correct pronoun usage
which
However
, students
have different needs for their education. Eventually
schools would need to set up curriculum Add a comma
Eventually,
according to
what they need. For example
, there are students
have
Correct pronoun usage
who have
receive
Change the verb form
received
subject
in school just about 50% but their friends have received 100%. Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
Consequently
, it does not balance and could affect how the class improves. because half of the class is already to the new subject but the others have to adapt slowly with
the class.
In conclusion, There are advantages to encouraging our Change preposition
to
students
together but I agree students
have different needs so we should put them according to
what they need.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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