The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009
The table chart presents the data about the
salaries
of both secondary and high school teachers in Australia, Denmark,
Luxembourg
, Japan and Korea in 2009. Looking from an
overall
perspective, the country's
most high-paid
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highest
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salary was
Luxembourg
,
whereas
the lowest salary that was paid to teachers was in Australia. Among all 5 countries, in 2009, Australia’s and Denmark’s teachers’
salaries
rose from 28,000 to 48,000 in 9
years
and 45,000 to 54,000 in 8
years
, respectively, reaching their maximum.
However
, in
Luxembourg
, Japan and Korea
salaries
were increasing even after 15
years
from the year when the teacher first time was hired. In
Luxembourg
, where the initial
salaries
were 80,000, after 15
years
can be increased to 119,000 and in another 15
years
may rise to 132,000. After the first 15
years
from the date of the first start of work, Japanese and Korean teachers’
salaries
rose from starting
salaries
of 34,000 and 30,000 to 65,000 and 48,000, respectively. If
to
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count from the beginning of the day of admission, the
salaries
in Japan reach its peak
by
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of
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86,000 in 37
years
,
while
in Korea, the maximum of 62,000 is reached in 34
years
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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