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Many people believe that wearing a uniform to work is good,while others argue against it

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One of the most recent trends of today's world is the upsurge in wearing a
uniform
 to the workplace. There is a widespread
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belief among people that thing is a popular subject of debate. In my perspective wearing a
uniform
 has more positive impacts than negatives. On the other
hands
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,critics may point out some drawbacks,
also
 they might
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 that It gives a monotonous feeling and It is very
difficulty
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 to wear some uniforms
while
 using
to
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public transportation.
On the other hand
,there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. Mainly, a
uniform
 gives us
the
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safety inside the workplace. Truly it is the most
proponderant
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 one and it has many positive consequences in various ways.
Secondly
,it gives a good identity to
worker
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. As an example police officers.
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 only that it gives us the feeling of equality. If we consider
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all doctors
amd
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and
 nurses same
uniform
in
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 the theater.
Furthermore
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 it helps to get the respect from the society. In view of the argument outlined above
ine
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one
 can conclude that despite having some drawbacks,the benefits of wearing a
uniform
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 in society are indeed too dire to ignore.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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