The chart below shows the male and female internet users aged that 15-24 in 2000.

The chart below shows the male and female internet users aged that 15-24 in 2000.
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The graph below illustrates the percentage number of men and women who used the
internet
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for different missions which are Social networks ,Online shopping, Email as well and other
activities
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also
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,the people between the ages of 15 to 24.
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,it was in the year 2000.
Overall
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, the amount of ladies who used the
internet
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for sending Emails was more whilst the gents were fewer.
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, a lot of boys participated in the use of
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Internet
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the Internet
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for Other
activities
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compared to the girls. A lot of men accessed the web for Social networks
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the girls were less.
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,both males and females who gained access to the
internet
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for Online shopping were a smaller amount.Again, the boy's percentage was below the girl's percentage.
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,the ladies who used the
internet
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for Other
activities
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and Emails were more than the gents.
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,neither the boys nor the girls who used the web for other
activities
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were above twenty per cent.
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, the amount of people who used the
internet
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for emails for both ladies and gents was a lot.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, activities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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