The chart below shows the male and female internet users aged that 15-24 in 2000.

The chart below shows the male and female internet users aged that 15-24 in 2000.
The graph below illustrates the percentage number of men and women who used the
internet
for different missions which are Social networks ,Online shopping, Email as well and other
activities
also
,the people between the ages of 15 to 24.
Moreover
,it was in the year 2000.
Overall
, the amount of ladies who used the
internet
for sending Emails was more whilst the gents were fewer.
Additionally
, a lot of boys participated in the use of
Internet
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the Internet
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for Other
activities
compared to the girls. A lot of men accessed the web for Social networks
in contrast
the girls were less.
Furthermore
,both males and females who gained access to the
internet
for Online shopping were a smaller amount.Again, the boy's percentage was below the girl's percentage.
In addition
,the ladies who used the
internet
for Other
activities
and Emails were more than the gents.
Besides
,neither the boys nor the girls who used the web for other
activities
were above twenty per cent.
Also
, the amount of people who used the
internet
for emails for both ladies and gents was a lot.
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