The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph depicts the comparison between the hits of
music
choice and pop parade from different numbers of visitors
on
the online website. The data is measured by the thousands of numbers for a Change preposition
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period
of fifteen days
.
By and large, the line graph clearly presented that there was a significant unstabled number
of people
using two kinds of online website music
during the periods of time.
According to
the statistical data of the number
of online music
visitors
, the most popular music
chosen by people
in
the website was pop parade, Change preposition
on
while
music
choice became the least popular.However
, turning to the details it could be plainly viewed that during the first three days
in
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of
music
parade
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parade,
number
of visitors
remained constant, which accounted for approximately 120 thousand
people
. Nevertheless
, it declined dramatically between the fourth and the ninth period
of time. Then
it jumped rapidly in the next 3 days
until it peaked around
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at around
thousand
people
in
the 11th Change preposition
on
days
and achieved the highest Fix the agreement mistake
day
number
of people
at the end
of the period
(170 thousand
).
Turning to the contrast, the visitors
in
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to
music
choice started in very small popularity, between 40 and 60 thousands
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thousand
of
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apply
people
, in the beginning of time until day eleven. In addition
to this
, it showed a dramatic increase in the following days
and it peaked at 120 thousand
. However
, at the end
of the period
it plummeted sharply from 120 Add a comma
period,
thousand
to around 70 thousand
of
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apply
people
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, visitors, period, days, number, people, thousand with synonyms.
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