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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #countries #world #challenges #environment #population #education #country #face #ten #years
Nowadays, there is no doubt that there is a significant change in all
areas
 like population,
education
 and environment worldwide including
my
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 country. The issues that
public
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the public
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 can face in upcoming
years
 are overcrowding with
less
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fewer
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 resources
as well as
unemployement
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unemployment
.
However
, these issues can
recover
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be recovered
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 by using suitable
methods
such
 as
using
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family planning
methods
, and by making
education
 compulsory. The following paragraphs will elucidate both stances in detail with lucid examples. To commence, the foremost issue will be overcrowding which means people are suffering from several health problems namely communicable diseases like COVID because of
less
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fewer
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 resources and less space to live. In
india
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India
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,
for instance
, 20% of the people are dying
due to
 these
transfering
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transferring
 diseases like
maleria
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malaria
 and the number is increasing
everyday
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every day
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. Apart from that, there will be
less
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fewer
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 resources in the upcoming
years
due to
 overcrowding.
According to
 the U.S.A., there will be
scarity
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security
scarcity
 of not only for food items but
also
 for living
areas
, if
government
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the government
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 is not focusing on it now. On the other side,
this
 can be controlled by using proper
techiques
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techniques
such
 as
eduacte
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educate
 the community about family planning
methods
 and
the
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their
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 benefits of it.
For example
, there should be some seminars on these
methods
 in the urban
as well as
 countryside
areas
.
As a result
, there will be control of
population
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the population
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 in the
few
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next few
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years
.
Secondly
, the government should make
a
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education
 compulsory
upto
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up to
 secondary
education
 which will be helpful not for society but
also
 for nations. In India,
for instance
, the prime minister
introduce
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 a program in which
education
 is free
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for upto
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upto
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up to
 14
years
. In a nutshell, there is no doubt that the upcoming
years
are
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will be
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challenging
challening
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challenging
 in all
areas
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, fully developed body paragraphs, and a strong conclusion. The introduction should outline the main points that will be discussed, and the conclusion should effectively summarize your stance without introducing new information. Develop your ideas fully so that the essay flows logically from one point to the next with appropriate transitions.
task achievement
A complete response to the task includes an exploration of all parts of the prompt, with a balanced discussion of each aspect. Ensure that your essay discusses the potential problems your country will face as well as how these problems can be overcome. Each point should be relevant and supported by examples or explanations from your own knowledge and experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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