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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming, and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?

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A large amount of evidence shows that
growing
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use
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 of
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car
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 is
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contibutor
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contributor
 to global warming
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 it has
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a negative
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 effect on human
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 too. In
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 to decline the
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.
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long term
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 view and subsidize electric
car
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use
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. Technology has come a long way and electric
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car
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 are safer to
use
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.
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 electric
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car
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 are increasing in popularity.
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the
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 recent survey done by
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Time of India revealed that 70% of
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 willing to buy electric
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car
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 in future because the crude oil is too costly. Another possible approach
, Government
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the government
 should invest more
on
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 public transport so that people who
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 easily commute from one place to another place . Evidence shows that well-maintained, reliable, and frequent means of transport
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 as bus,
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, are regularly used by the public.
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more immediate,
cash-flow positive
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 solution is to directly discourage
car
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use
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. Increasing road taxes on people with more than two cars, and road pricing schemes
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 as a traffic congestion charge during peak traffic times would reduce the number of non-essential
car
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 journeys and encourage people to
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 other forms of transport
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 as buses. In conclusion,
while
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 emissions are a growing threat to both the health of the planet and individuals, electrifying cars, mass transportation systems, and traffic management programs can help
to
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mitigate the issue in the short and long term.

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Your opinion

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