You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: say where you are going, describe your home explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear _________,

#travel #summer #friend #house #home #addresses #_________

Dear Felycia, How are you,

Felycia

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Felicia

? I hope you are fine and healthy. I writing

this

letter because

need your help to look

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at my

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house

while

go on holiday next summer with my family. I will go to Japan

during

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from

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june

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until 9

june

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June

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Moreover

, it is the first

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have travel

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travel

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travelled

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to Japan, and

go to

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am going

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with my family, so

am very happy. My

house

is located near Losari Beach which is near your

house

too. My

house

just

have

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has

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1 floor which is

small

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a small

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house

because it just

have

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one kitchen, two bedrooms, one living room, and two toilets. My

house

also

have

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a garden which is my favorite place at home. I just need your help to look

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at my

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house

two times in one week because my

house

area is quite dangerous.

Futhermore

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Furthermore

, CCTV's

house

is broken and

Lock

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door security is broken too. I

also

need your help to check the doors and windows

still

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are still

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locked and

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closed

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. If you don't mind,

neee

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need

your help to water my plant outside my

house

. I hope you have

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apply

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time to look

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house

and

willing

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to help me. If you have free time, we can meet after my holiday. Thank you

Felycia

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Felicia

. Best regards, Andrianto Raharja

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Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph presents one clear idea or topic and transitions smoothly into the next, maintaining a coherent flow throughout the letter.

Coherence & Cohesion

Include a proper greeting and closing, as they are important for formal correspondence, and be careful with casual language and expressions.

Task Achievement

Address all parts of the prompt with sufficient detail. Each request should be clearly and fully explained, ensuring that the response is complete and informative.

Task Achievement

Adopt a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which should reflect the formal nature of the writing task and the relationship with the recipient.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

214 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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