Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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a
Remove the article
apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun alot in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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alot
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a lot
lot

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of
data
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so that
potencial
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potential

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in scientific
research
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,
assigment
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assignment

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and education
worlwide
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worldwide

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.
While
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others
thinks
Change the verb form
think

The singular verb thinks does not appear to agree with the plural subject others. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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there are
limitted
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limits

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in
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to sharing

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share
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data
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depent
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depend
depends
dependent

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on
value
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the value

The noun phrase value seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of
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data
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the data

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. In my
prespective
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perspective

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, There are
usefull
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useful

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with
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for

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share
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much of information,
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
i
Change the capitalization
I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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agree there are
controling
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control

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for
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over

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our
share
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of
data
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because of the
impacts
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impact

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to
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on

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reader
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the reader

The noun phrase reader seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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and
result
Correct article usage
the result

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to act of the reader. There are
benecial
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benefits

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to
share
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many
data
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to improve
comunities
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communities

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with
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apply

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.
Data
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could
Wrong verb form
encourage
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encourages
Wrong verb form
encourage

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb encourages. Consider changing it.

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people
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new hard
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skills
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skill
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skills

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and soft
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skills
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skill
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skills

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so that
make
Verb problem
apply

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they
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them
Correct pronoun usage
they

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become more
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educated
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educates
Wrong verb form
educated

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb educates. Consider changing it.

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.
Accordingly
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,
to
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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what they
received
Wrong verb form
receive

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb received. Consider changing it.

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can help them to get
job
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a job
the job

The noun phrase job seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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and make some movements
to
Change preposition
in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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comunities
Correct your spelling
communities

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.
For instance
Linking Words

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, Narasi TV, a platform of news
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Use synonyms

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share
Correct subject-verb agreement
shares

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research
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about pollution in Jakarta so that
help
Verb problem
apply

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people
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living in
jakarta
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Jakarta

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find out the best way to solve
themselve
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themselves

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from damage.
However
Linking Words

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,
There
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there

There does not appear to be a proper noun. Consider lowercasing it.

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is significant concern about
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the limitation
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limitation
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limitations

It seems that limitation may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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shared
Change the form of the verb
sharing

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of
data
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. There
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is

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many
Replace the quantifier
much

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information
do
Verb problem
that is

There may be a verb use issue here.

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not ready to
consume
Wrong verb form
be consumed

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb consume. Consider changing it.

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by
citizen
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citizens

It seems that citizen may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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hence
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

every
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Use synonyms

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people
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person

It seems that people may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has

It seems that the verb have does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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different
Correct article usage
a different

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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background, ability and
ages
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age

It seems that ages may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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to accept
data
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in media. Giving
data
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

can
lead
Verb problem
apply

There may be a verb use issue here.

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impact
to
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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every
Correct determiner usage
apply

It seems that determiner use may be incorrect here.

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people
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in what they think and what they do.
For example
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
research
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

about
covid-19
Correct your spelling
COVID-19

The word covid-19 doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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no aqual
tend
Correct subject-verb agreement
tends

It seems that the verb tend does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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to make
people
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in the world
get
Verb problem
apply

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panic attack and act dangered. In conclusion, it is
usefull
Correct your spelling
useful

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to
share
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

many
Replace the quantifier
much

It appears that the quantifier many does not fit with the uncountable noun information. Consider changing it.

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information to support education,
research
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and
tecnology
Correct your spelling
technology

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, but,
i
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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agree
data
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

must be
controling
Correct your spelling
controlled

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introduction conclusion
The essay lacks a well-defined introduction and conclusion. Ensure that the essay begins with an introduction that clearly paraphrases the question and ends with a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates the opinion.
logical structure
The essay needs to present a logical sequence of ideas. Use cohesive devices to better connect sentences and paragraphs, and make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
supported main points
Support your main points with specific details and examples. Instead of making generalizations, provide concrete evidence or scenarios that directly relate to your arguments.
complete response
The response tends to be incomplete and partially addresses the task. Ensure that you discuss both views mentioned in the prompt fully and provide a clear opinion throughout the essay.
clear comprehensive ideas
The ideas presented are not entirely clear and comprehensive. Work on structuring your sentences and paragraphs to clearly express your ideas and ensure that each paragraph elaborates on a distinct main idea.
relevant specific examples
The use of examples is crucial in IELTS essays. Improve the relevance of your examples by linking them more closely with the argument and ensuring they illustrate the point convincingly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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