IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
#proportion #four #materials #country
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph provides data about the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
Overall
Linking Words
, in all
years
Use synonyms
 the highest recycling
rate
Use synonyms
 had paper and cardboard and the lowest recycling
rate
Use synonyms
 had plastics. As can clearly be seen, in all
years
Use synonyms
 the highest recycling
rate
Use synonyms
 had paper and cardboard.
Initially
Linking Words
, the
rate
Use synonyms
 was approximately 65 per
cent
Use synonyms
. Its peak was in 1994 when the proportion of paper and cardboard was 80 per
cent
Use synonyms
. After 1994 the
rate
Use synonyms
 started to decrease and in 2010 the
rate
Use synonyms
 was 70 per
cent
Use synonyms
. The
rate
Use synonyms
 of glass containers in 1982 was 50 per
cent
Use synonyms
. From 1982 to 1990 the
rate
Use synonyms
 dropped,
however
Linking Words
 after that the
rate
Use synonyms
 started to rise and in 2020 was its peak
with
Change preposition
at
show examples
 60 per
cent
Use synonyms
. In 1986 recycling
rate
Use synonyms
 for aluminum cans was more or less 5 per
cent
Use synonyms
 over the
years
Use synonyms
 the
rate
Use synonyms
 abruptly increased and in 2010 the
rate
Use synonyms
 was roughly 45 per
cent
Use synonyms
.
Recycling
Add an article
The recycling
show examples
rate
Use synonyms
 for plastics started in 1990 the proportion was less than 5 per
cent
Use synonyms
. Even though it rose over the
years
Use synonyms
 it had the lowest recycling
rate
Use synonyms
 compared to other materials.
Submitted by tmargaryan2006 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, rate, cent with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
What to do next:
Look at other essays: