The graph below shows the number ofshops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number ofshops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The given line graph illustrates how many shops
that open
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opened
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and
close
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closed
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during the given period from 2011 to 2018. The units are measured in
total
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the total
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of
store
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stores
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every year.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the figure for shops both for closures and openings relatively fluctuative, except the total of closures in 2015 experienced a significant fall. In terms of new shops, in 2011 stood at 8500 units and
this
figure was the highest throughout the year.
However
,
this
number dropped sharply in 2012 by 4500 to exactly 4000, before increasing to 6000 in 2014. The trend decreased again with the same amount in 2012
,
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and witnessed a gradual fall to 3000 in 2018. Regarding the
shop
that closed, began at just above 6000 units in 2011. The trend fluctuated between 2012 and 2014. In 2014, the figure for the closed
shop
was near to
opening
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the opening
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shop
, at just above 6000 before hitting the trough in 2011 at just below 1000. The following year, the
shop
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number of shops
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that closed increased back to 2016 and remained unchanged until 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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